AIYING · TODAY, STILL UNWRITTEN · STORY #001
The Message That Sounded Like Her
One situation. A story. Your next possibility.
By Ravindra Dastikop · Fiction
Meera’s father thanked her for a message she had spent three minutes writing and eleven minutes deciding whether to send.
“Read it twice,” he replied. “Didn’t know you remembered the bus stop.”
She did remember.
Rainwater running off the shelter. Her schoolbag between his feet. The way he waited until she found a window seat before lifting his hand.
What she had never managed was telling him that she remembered.
That evening, between a work call and the pressure cooker’s first whistle, she had opened an AI chat.
“Help me write something to my father. We mostly talk about medicines, bills and whether I’ve eaten. I want to thank him without making it sound like a farewell speech.”
The first draft called him her guiding light. She deleted it.
“Less grand. He used to wait with me for my school bus. Even when it made him late.”
The next version sounded closer. She removed a sentence, changed “Dad” to “Appa,” and added the detail about his wet sandals.
Then she sent it.
Now his reply sat on the screen.
She typed, “Of course I remember.”
Before she could send it, another message arrived.
“Your mother would have liked this.”
Meera put the phone beside the stove.
Her mother had been the one who kept conversations moving. After she died, father and daughter had become efficient with each other. Reports received. Tablets taken. Money transferred.
Meera picked up the phone again.
She could tell him she had used AI. But she could already hear herself making the moment about how the message had been produced.
She could say nothing. The bus stop was hers. The wet sandals were his. Still, she wondered what he believed she had done that evening: sat quietly, remembered him, searched for words.
She had done all three. Just with another window open.
One way this could unfold
She called.
“Everything all right?” he asked.
“Yes, Appa.”
“Cooker going?”
“Rice.”
They listened to the whistle together.
“That message,” she began. “I had help writing it. From an AI tool.”
“Oh.”
She waited.
“Did it know about the sandals?”
“I told it.”
“Good. They were terrible sandals.”
She laughed, then found herself explaining too quickly. The drafts. The deleted sentences. How she had meant it.
“Meera,” he said. “I believe you.”
She stopped.
“But next time, you can send the untidy one also.”
On her phone, the chat was still open behind the call. There was another version she could ask for. Something warmer. Something that answered him properly.
“I don’t know what to say now,” she said.
“Have you put salt in the rice?”
“Appa.”
“You forget when you’re busy.”
She lowered the flame and pulled a chair into the kitchen.
“Tell me about those sandals.”
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